Week 9

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Week 9

Postby Brenda Michelle » Sun Jul 13, 2003 10:33 pm

ok, i tryed to think of a challeging topic. and here is what i came up with...... this weeks topic is

BETRAYAL


Well, good luck to all...... ( and have fun!!!!)

Brenda Michelle :D
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Postby bench » Wed Jul 16, 2003 11:45 pm

This has proven to be a difficult topic. As of today, there has only been my entry and I know it is not good. I had to open up many healed wounds to find inspiration for this. Here goes:


Now I Have Nothing


I loved you with all my life
Yet you loved someone else.
You know how it pains me
Like you cut me with a knife.

We made a promise, you and I
To love each other forever.
We'll overcome all our problems
Our love will never die.

But why when I turned my back
You stabbed me with a knife.
You bedded with somebody else
My being, with infidelity, you hack.

I asked myself why you did this to me?
Is it what I cannot give
That made you change your mind
And make your affections for me flee?

I gave you everything
My whole heart, life and soul.
Now you've left me dry
Now I have nothing.
Live Life, Love Life
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Postby Brenda Michelle » Thu Jul 17, 2003 8:17 am

that is very good bench! i really like it, do you think my topic is really hard? hmm it is already thursday and you are the only one.........
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Postby RinRin » Thu Jul 17, 2003 9:22 am

actually i've just been too lazy to think of anything as of yet! hehe...well here's mine, then!

Still You Betrayed

I can't protect you anymore,
you gave my heart a painful sore,
your intentions are now so clear
why couldn't I see that I lived in fear?

The love you gave me was to be cherished
but now that love has surely perished,
I used to feel that wonderful surprise
every time you looked into my eyes.

You masked your feelings, tied a knot
smiled a smile that forever I sought,
and then you broke it, and let it all go,
now of your true feelings, i surely know.

Now that it's over, I've nothing to give,
and my body is weakened, hating to live.
I gave you my life, my heart, my whole,
and still you betrayed me, ripped apart my soul.

So now I stand before you, to draw a truce,
to mend my heart, from my body, completely loose,
and still you cannot see the aching pain I hold,
from the false reasons that you so happily told.

:D

*RinRin*
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Postby Brenda Michelle » Thu Jul 17, 2003 10:14 am

Wow rin rin, i really like your too. both of you i can tell put alot of feeling into your work.
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Postby Seizure » Thu Jul 17, 2003 12:39 pm

I would have put one up, but I was just selected, so I don't think it would be right for me to try again immediately afterward.
Life is just a game, not everyone can win
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Postby Brenda Michelle » Thu Jul 17, 2003 1:17 pm

go head and put one up..... i love to read poetry..
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Postby RinRin » Thu Jul 17, 2003 3:25 pm

thank you brenda! :D

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Postby bench » Thu Jul 17, 2003 5:43 pm

Thanks Brenda!
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Postby Brenda Michelle » Thu Jul 17, 2003 5:49 pm

You are both very welcome. i enjoy reading others poems, and you 2 write freat poems. you are wonderful poets.
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