her's da story...hope it inspires u 2write

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Postby Dreamer » Tue Aug 19, 2003 10:42 pm

Then There was "See" 8/7 which Is found here
http://truepoetry.com/content/default.asp?PoemID=3622

"starry Night" 8/7 found here http://truepoetry.com/content/default.asp?PoemID=3618

not to forget to give mention to this classic....

"Falling hero" also 8/7 found here http://www.tupac-online.com/info/poetry/when_are_hero_falls_my_hero.asp

and here By: 2Pac Shakur
http://www.tupacnet.org/poetry/poetry.htm

this would mean... could it???? 2Pac you're alive man!!!!!! How the hell are you?????


need I go on and on.....
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Postby Seizure » Tue Aug 19, 2003 11:04 pm

I think the point was made. He was lying. Now the question is if he's going to man up and take the fall for his own actions and move on. It's not something that can't be forgiven.
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Postby Seizure » Wed Aug 20, 2003 12:20 pm

Just to keep everyone updated, I have taken it upon myself to draft a 3 part poem story based on Soltanto's description. But I will be checking the net to see if my work appears anywhere else under someone elses' name. If it does, especially considering I'm saying it now, I will take every legal measure available for compensation for having my words stolen from me. Don't steal my work, ever. You can post it wherever as long as I'm acredited with it. Absolutely no exceptions.. that's on message boards, web sites, emails, everything. I don't think I'm being unreasonable there either. I'm putting just as much feeling into these writings as I do in all of mine, I'm including a lot of my personal experience in it as it relates to make it more believable. I dont' like writing artificial, and I think you'll see that.
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Postby Seizure » Wed Aug 20, 2003 1:41 pm

Well I have drafted the three poems I mentioned earlier.. .and also found out I already wrote one about the girlfriend situation... he says it was for no reason what-so-ever above, but in his request for me to write the poem, he said it was because she saw him kiss the school slut. I'll go ahead and provide that one here as well so you can all see the dated work to ensure it's not stolen later like I'm afraid it might be one day (judging from the above proof).

This is now the extent of my contribution to the life story above.

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Lonely Bridge (1 of 3)

I'm at my friend's house, he is on the net
He is my best friend, but he seems upset
I looked at his screen, talking to his girl
But just what I saw, made my skin curl
Did she speak the truth? Just what did she mean?
She left a message, flashing on his screen
"Never blame yourself, but I have to go"
Where is just a guess, but I think I know

She wasn't happy, for the longest time
I had always wished, she'd go make that climb
Back to happiness, back to being free
How unfortunate, it's not up to me
Only she can change, it is up to her
I think of them, and recall how they were
How they used to be, they were so happy
It's not my business, but it bothers me

The very next day, I was at the fridge
When he called and said, she went to the bridge
And apparently, she had told the truth
She felt terrible, stress wasted her youth
She went there last night, threw herself from grace
And now is in her final resting place
He never was the same, when his girlfriend died
At the lonely bridge, he broke down and cried

For Soltanto Il Dio Può Giudi

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Emotionless Face (2 of 3)

Hey, you up to chill? Na, not up to it
How about a film? Man what don't you get?
I want to be alone, so get out of here
Yeah, we are best friends, You don't need to cheer
Me up anymore, I don't smiling care
I'm so stressed out now, I just need some air.
Well okay then bro, I'll leave you alone
But if you need me, just pick up the phone.

So I walked away, went to see Andrew
I'll tell him all this, he'd know what to do
Drew looked up and said, "Well, it's his birthday
In just a few days, that's not far away."
Yeah, of course, you're right! We'll surprise him then
Take him out to clubs, make him smile again
So we planned it out, he's sure to flip out
He'd do it for me, that's what we're about

The day finally came, Drew waited outside
I went right on in, and made him decide
To go with us then, and chill with us all
"Man, go on ahead, I gotta make a call"
So we waited there, for quite a while
I reached for my phone, so I could dial
But I left it there, I went back to his place
I found him on the floor, all life left his face

For Soltanto Il Dio Può Giudi

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My Guilt (3 of 3)

I hear a eulogy, my best friend had died
I failed so bad, but I really tried
I just fell so short, why am I here now?
I had to f*** up, I had to allow
Him to take his life, him to meet his fate
Long before his time, man, I was too late
I knew something was wrong, when he didn't show
Before it happened, why didn't I go?

It is now the time, to lift the coffin
I then took my place, it's time to begin
We carried it out, to his place of rest
We lowered it in, man, you were the best
Friend I ever had, I'll miss you a lot
I gave him my chain, "You thought I forgot?
I said you could have it, it'd be yours someday
Even though you're gone, it's yours anyway

The service is over, still I waited there
I told him everything, from how life was unfair
To the times we had, to our plans that night
But the more I said, it still didn't seem right
My guilt is weighing down, everything inside
I've lost my feeling, I've lost all my pride
I'm gonna miss you, rest in peace my friend
The joy of our lives, why'd it have to end?

For Soltanto Il Dio Può Giudi

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You Should Know

There's some things on my chest, I think I must let out
So I'm writing you, you know what about
We were together, for over a year
You were my first love, you eased my every fear
More than anything, I wanted you happy
You were everything, that mattered to me
But life has a way, to always turn out wrong
If it can it must, I just don't belong

Before I was with you, I was all alone
I had many faults, I could not atone
Yet you still saw me, as someone in your eyes
This was the first time, I had a good surprise
I was always lost, I never had a soul
No one noticed me, I think it was God's goal
But you washed away, all that brought me pain
I was so happy, I just can't explain

But I kissed the slut, that's stuck in our school
I just don't know why, I felt like a fool
I tried to tell you, and you got so pissed
It's not like we fucked, girl we only kissed
Then you found a guy, and cheated on me
That went a little far, I think you would agree
You tried to get me back, but it was obscene
You were so dirty, you needed Mr Clean

Just a year later, we talked on the net
You'd leave your boyfriend, for me, yeah, I bet
We can never talk, without the fighting
So how could that work? I don't want your sting
I still miss you now, but just understand
That girl that I kissed, was just never planned
I'll regret forever, just letting you go
But our time has passed, I thought that you should know
Life is just a game, not everyone can win
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Postby Leah06 » Wed Aug 20, 2003 2:27 pm

OK, my turn. I may be a stupid teenager to you or whatever but this situation and what you did really made me mad. First of all, like seizure said what do you mean "you people"? Not one of us are the same we are all different and share the love for poetry and writing. ANd the fact that you insulted my family makes me really mad. And yes, i consider the poeple on my site my family. And you need to give each one of them an appolgy. Not only did you put them down but you insulted their poetry and art. And that by the way is so low, i didnt think someone could sink lower. But, sadly, i was verry wrong. Then i find that you have been taking other peoples work and making it your own!i mean what the hell is that?! Just because you cant write yourself you want to steal other peoples work! Not only is that illegal, it is down right rude and evil! And just because no one wrote about your life it dosent mean you can insult them. What if they didnt have time? Or they didnt get on the website to read what you wanted them to write about? Or what if they just didnt want to? Think about it!
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Postby Soltanto Il Dio Può Giudi » Sun Aug 24, 2003 9:33 am

ok so unfortunatelly i threw it all up josh...u know what im talking about...

so many pissed off people...cant do much but apologise i suppose...even tho im more than certain it will not make the slightest difference to some of you i will still apologise...

i really dont know how or what to say exactly but im sorry for everything guys...my deepest apologies to all...i really mean it...

anyway i leave u all with this msg...i decided to check into rehab n get my poop together...im also selling my comp cos im going back to europe for a while...start my life again cos i realised something today...the way i was going was not living...it was killing me...and whats the point of living if u dont feel alive right?

so n e way
peace out

ohh and my story is 4 real...despite what you might think...jst 4 da record

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Postby Leah06 » Sun Aug 24, 2003 3:50 pm

thanks so much for appologizing. It means a lot to me even if my poetry wasent in the problem. To tell you the truth, this is my family and i will do anything for them. And you appologizing is much apritiated. Thanks for doing it. I hope your life comes together.

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Postby bench » Sun Aug 24, 2003 8:26 pm

Good luck!
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Postby Soltanto Il Dio Può Giudi » Wed Aug 27, 2003 2:45 am

umm ok i see my other post never made it through...ok

well to summarize my last post...my sencier apologies 2 all...umm i went into alot more detail in that last post but i really dont have the time to rewrite it all again cos as i said earlier im seling my comp so this is the last im gonna b on it...

n e way
best of luck 2 all

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Postby rubydragon » Wed Apr 14, 2004 7:19 am

Well All I can say is it seems to me like this guy just gets a kick out of winding people up which he seems to have succeded, I makes me wonder why people would want to agitate others, its kind of a sad way to live!!
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