Creeping into the room, like an eerie night’s luminescence, the fog graced its presence within the scene. Elise’s gaze never left the looming portrait, until the fog began to blind her view. The moon’s rays now were masked with darkness, the whispering willows refusing to tell of its passing. A sudden hush took place, not a sound, and by this time, the shivers on her spine grew intense. Though fear sung like a canary within her bindings, her voice out spoke her, chanting in some sort of tongue. As the room returned to normal, this supernatural chant seeming to be advancing, as well was something lurking in the shadows. It came from behind – Elise screamed.
------- Author's Notes -------
This is the prologue to a story I'm writing. I'm in the process of working on Chapter 1, but it's getting complex to come up with a bit more inspiration to stretch out the story. Nonetheless, this is a vampire story, and there's a lot of plots. Every time I finish a chapter, I'll post it up here. But I would really appreciate some constructive criticism so I can improve. In the prologue, it explains about a young 17 year old girl who's dreaming in the first paragraph, and her dying moments with her older brother, John. As I said, the story will have a lot of twists in the plots, so what you read in this will probably alter very much by the 2-3 chapters.
Comments on this poem/writing:
|Blair (188.8.131.52) -- Wednesday, February 23 2005, 09:48 pm|
That is awesome! I can't wait till Chapter One comes out. Post it soon!
|Wouldn't you like to know... (184.108.40.206) -- Thursday, May 19 2005, 09:08 pm|
When are ya gonna write the series? i want to read it!
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