Compelled into silence;
Eyes with story to tell.
Fragile as the beating heart,
With a soul to sell.
It was a very late eve
On which a certain man stood;
Down the dwindled road,
Was a woman of sainthood.
This beaut was known by many,
But exiled from above.
She wandered from each heart--
For this woman's name was Love.
Those lips seeped with poison-
Spilling words like a glass of wine.
It seemed as drunken death's fancy,
Was with which we were to dine.
She meandered with the wind;
Came and left with dawn.
Arose of dusk's blasphemy--
Sashayed until she was gone.
It left many bewildered;
Speechless, some were to say.
That they were so honored
To be visited by her that day.
Some say she was a legend;
The fantasy of a game.
But with every breath of wind,
Comes that saunter of the dame.
------- Author's Notes -------
This was done while half asleep, munching on a chocolate chip brownie at four in the morning, so I might edit the poem every now and then to my liking, or to make more sense. (: To me, it seemed more like a tale of the heart than anything, so I figured it was more of along the lines of a story-ish type poem. In a way, I guess this could hold personal value to me on some levels, but mainly, I'd like to see people's opinions on what I write. So I'd appreciate any criticism whatsoever.
Comments on this poem/writing:
|Meridian (188.8.131.52) -- Wednesday, February 23 2005, 07:54 pm|
Hot Lyrics girl ...your poem shines like a supernova! I love the metaphors and similies, and all sorts of imagery used in the text! Right on girl, right on! Excellent! *Meri*
|Scorpio (184.108.40.206) -- Thursday, February 24 2005, 05:39 am|
Thank you! I haven't written a good poem in a while, so the compliment is really nice to hear. I'm glad you liked it!
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