WEEK THREE

This is a category for playing around with our talents for writing

Postby Brenda Michelle » Wed Jun 04, 2003 10:21 pm

everett, that is a great poem. it has alot of emotions and you expressed them well. great Job!!!! :D
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Postby rubydragon » Fri Jun 06, 2003 8:09 am

Trapped Inside


Staring into the night sky
my body starts to shake,
rain falls and drenches my torn flesh
my heart begins to break,
laid on the ground wet and crying
wishing for freedom, but still denying,

I long for the comfort of you
as my empty body lies,
trapped inside this cell of pain
my tears flow from these bloodshot eyes,
constant screaming, driven by death
wishing for my final breath,

This is how it is for me everyday
longing for the shadows of night,
so the end can come and take me
I wont go without a fight,
I'm lost without you, I want a chance,
I'm a prisoner of my own existence.

Set me free
The only true source of inspiration, is to be an inspiration.

There is No More Inspiration!!
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Postby bench » Fri Jun 06, 2003 10:40 pm

Nice one ruby! I love your poem!
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Postby Stacey » Sat Jun 07, 2003 12:03 pm

I have read all of these poems, soo many times. It was a very hard decision to make. You guys are so talented. I enjoyed every single poem.

And, I'm sorry to break the news to Seizure, but he has lost again. :(

I have chosen xeverettx as the winner. Congratulations everett, nice writing. I hope you have as much fun as i did trying to choose a winner. It's really hard!!!!

OHhh and putting them all together is a challenge too. that's what i'm going to attempt to do right under this post. Wish me luck!!!!! :?
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Postby Stacey » Sat Jun 07, 2003 12:24 pm

Prison of Love : by all of the poets above (excellent job everyone) :D


Lonely days are now my fate
I long for the comfort of you
I'm tired of being in your prison of love
Nothing to do but think

He said he'd never leave
but, he left me for the moon
I must escape my heart
I must escape it soon

My tears flow from these bloodshot eyes
I die a little each day
I am a prisoner of my mind
you kept me here
slowly driving me insane

He said he'd never leave
but, he left me for the moon
I must escape my heart
I must escape it soon

I am in prison
trapped like some mongrel dog
I'm too tired to run
and yet i still peer through to the other side

My body starts to shake
Drowning in my own self made sea
With each tear that fell
I beg you please let me go
Let me live my life

Only time will tell
If i make it out of this place
Alive
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Postby LinzAy » Sat Jun 07, 2003 5:03 pm

Yay! My lil sla.....er....EV won!!! congrats there boi! told ya u did an excellent job on that one!

Seiz! I can't believe you lost again!! :wink:
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Postby xeverettx » Sat Jun 07, 2003 7:15 pm

WoW.. me? coolness! i actually won something. alrighty well ill go post week 4 8)
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Postby Futantxx » Sat Jun 07, 2003 9:02 pm

Congratulations Ev. *wink* I told you so. :-p
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