WEEK 8

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Postby Brandi » Sun Jul 13, 2003 10:36 am

hey great job brenda!!!
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Postby Brenda Michelle » Sun Jul 13, 2003 10:28 pm

ummmm thanks everyone! i greatly apreciate your words. and i will try to vome up with a great topic for next's weeks poem thingy. :mrgreen:

and everett,
thanks for beliving that i could. :mrgreen: ( i love you always)
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Postby xeverettx » Sun Jul 13, 2003 11:29 pm

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"I've Broken Both My Legs Falling For You..."
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Postby Seizure » Tue Jul 15, 2003 1:49 am

sorry everyone.. i know i said i'd post monday with the big poem, but so far i only have rinrin, brenda michelle, and dreamer's poems included. I'm trying to make it all make sense and still be poetic with so many different views on the subject. So far it's coming out okay I think. I had to write a bit for it to make it all fit together, but I think I have finally gotten it right. Rest assured, everyone's will be inlcuded.

Sorry for the delay.
Life is just a game, not everyone can win
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Postby Seizure » Sat Jul 19, 2003 3:03 pm

Here's the poem I made out of every's work. I hope you like it, I don't know if I did it the right way or not.. but we'll see...

Time to Talk (Written by Seizure, RinRin, Brenda Michelle, Bench, Dreamer, Stacey, Leah06, Everett, and Brandi)

Please can I stay up? I don't want to sleep
I want to know why, you tend to weep
When dad comes home, every single night
I want to know why, you always fight
Why do families, beat up each other
Why must I defend, my little brother?
Are all families like this? Why is it so hard?
Why don't other kids', faces look as scarred?

Josh, I must tell you, that it's not your fault
Your dad is just sick, it will never halt
Families don't suffer, they are filled with joy
There is no reason, for them to destroy
Life they helped create, it doesn't make sense
I'll tell you stories, not keep suspense
Of what's faced now, each and every day
And how they do wrong, but are loved anyway

There's a girl named RinRin, wanting nothing more
Than to just be there, a lot more than before
Just for her family, even in hard times
Even when they go, and commit some crimes
You see she loves them Josh, and all she'll ever see
Is just a caring, loving family
Maybe not outside, but for sure within
To share her view, I would shed my skin

But Brenda Michelle, has it another way
She just had a mom, they loved anyway
Sometimes she'd break down, sometimes she would cry
Brenda couldn't tell, if she said a lie
Sometimes family cracked, when her mom was mad
But never like this, she was really sad
One day her family died, her mother passed away
There's still memories, that will always stay

Yet someone named Bench, loved her dad so much
That she still longed for, just a simple touch
She could hear his voice, she can see his face
Regardless where she looked, regardless of the place
She learned all her lessons, of life from her dad
And he'd never come home, abusive and mad
She will not forget, I'm going on a whim
Everything that matters, she learned all from him

A woman named Dreamer, has quite the view
If we loved like her, it would be so true
She thinks that all life, will cycle around
When you become a dad, you would just be bound
To be just like him, you know that's not true
But still for many, it's a likely view
I wish it could be, a good memory
And look back and smile, but fate disagrees

Then Stacey, oh my gosh, she puts all on faith
As a gift from god, but taken by the wraith
She always has a place, that she can go hide
She always has someone, that she can confide
Her family's always there, they will always care
Regardless if the pain, is too much to bear
She sees it as the sun, shining through the cracks
Her family's the proof, that these thoughts are facts

A girl named Leah, takes much for granted
These are all the seeds, her family has planted
She hates photographs, they take them anyway
She hates reunions, yet they make her stay
She hates doing chores, her parents make her work
She plays with her cousins, grandpa makes her smirk
But there's just one thing, she doesn't realize
They do these for love, to them she is a prize

Everett's a guy, that sees a crazy place
In family or not, and wants to hide his face
So many families, will just fall apart
It was not working, even from the start
He wonders why try, when it will not last
All his memories, haunt him from his past
It is not a question, if everyone is happy
Just remember friends, will always be family

Last we have Brandi, who loves them a lot
Even though her brother, and her always faught
She knows he still cares, she knows he'll be there
Even when he sticks, duct tape in her hair
Her mom was always there, soothing her with talk
Her dad was along side, when she learned to walk
Even though she doesn't, say it as she should
She loves them more, than you'd think she could

And now you see Josh, not everyone's like us
Just then the door opened, I heard my father cuss
"I will be right there," Josh I have to go
But whatever happens, I want you to know
I'm sorry for this life, I brought you into
Then she got up and, walked out of my view
Sounds of glass then crashed, my covers hid my head
This time it's not me, it is her instead
Life is just a game, not everyone can win
-Seizure
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Postby RinRin » Sat Jul 19, 2003 4:06 pm

wow seiz!!!!!! you really put a lot of work and heart into that one!! i'm impressed...well i'm always impressed by your work, but this is certainly one of your best, even though it came from other poems of ours, but still! the way you put it together, it just worked perfectly! it was really neat, and i loved it! GREAT JOB!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! :D:D:D:D:D:D !

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Postby Seizure » Sat Jul 19, 2003 6:56 pm

thanks RinRin... sorry it took so long... but I have been really busy lately dealing with some things. I'm glad you checked it out and could appreciate the time put in.

Thanks again...
Life is just a game, not everyone can win
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Postby RinRin » Sat Jul 19, 2003 8:55 pm

no prob! ;)

:D

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Postby Brenda Michelle » Sun Jul 20, 2003 11:11 am

wow seizure, this really turned out great! i dont think mine will be this good though........
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Postby xeverettx » Sun Jul 20, 2003 1:08 pm

whoa, that was great seiz! what a great piece of writing that you put together from our work. i sure do appreciate the time and effort you put into it!
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