Save Me [unfinished]
Author: Mike


Like ghosts in the snow,
You dance around me,
Pulling at my heartstrings
Begging to be free.

Yet I stand here forever,
Bound with invisible chains.
My eyes reflections of
The torment and pain.

Scars over my body,
Stains of the filthy past.
The silent decades of anger.
And the tear before last..

------- Author's Notes -------

k, I'm stuck with this. I like the first two lines of each of the stanzas.. Was wondering, can anyone help? ;l


Comments on this poem/writing:

Rick ( -- Wednesday, April 19 2006, 11:13 pm

Save Me [ unfinished ]

Hi Mike, It is hard to change some ones writings, because you never know what thoughts conjured up their feelings. But here are four lines. [I hope they are of some use to you.]

The essence of my soul is tarnished.
The demons have left there stains of crimson.
Leaving me with silent decades of rage.
My eyes are bleeding.
Name:                                           Remember Me

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