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Barely Breathing
Author: Angelina

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Dark, cold, quiet and calm
I am barely breathing.
My heart it breaks to see your face.
And I can hardly see it.
A mass of blur.
Dizziness overcomes my world.
I fall and I hit real hard.
I can no longer stand.
I am barely breathing.

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Comments on this poem/writing:

Leah06 (12.232.5.189) -- Monday, April 21 2003, 05:20 pm

Sounds like love....

I thought i was in love once but i turned out to be unreal. But this poem sounds like love. Nice writing! Great poem!
Crystal (206.214.67.1) -- Monday, April 21 2003, 10:30 pm

wow

I really liked the deep thought and main idea of the poem, and see a certain point of view with this poem, like thinking loudly to yourself and not doing anything about it, sort of like that. Great poem, hope you write more like this one.
Brittany Walker (66.244.0.36) -- Thursday, November 20 2003, 05:29 pm

good job

great job.....you should check out my poems....i think you would like them......
 
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