You Died..
Author: Mike


I was electrified by your eyes as they closed,
Drawn to your bitterswet mouth as it took its last breath.
I stroked your hair, fascinated with your every shudder as your life left you.

Morbidly fascinated.

Watching now, as your skin greys, your lips turn purple,
I feel the calm that can only come after losing a loved one,
The calm before the storm of emotions takes over.
Before the moans, the cries, the screams.
Before I feel the heartwrenching pangs of regret for
All the things I should have said.

And the things I did say.

Before I feel the emptiness inside,
Rising up from the bottom of the well that is my sorrow.
But for now, I stay calm,
Comptemplating the meaning of life,
And indeed.. Death.


Comments on this poem/writing:

Meridian ( -- Thursday, April 13 2006, 03:08 pm

Mike man

Descriptive. Intriguing. Intense. Hey Mike! "You Died" captures the narrator's feelings always! Continue on poet, continue on in writing!
Mike ( -- Thursday, April 13 2006, 08:41 pm


Hey Meri x] Thanks, always good to know that someone out there enjoys reading my stuff :heart:
Yan ( -- Thursday, May 4 2006, 09:57 pm


I love your poems, i find it hard to explain what my feelings are on the poems, except that sometimes they scare me, make me cry, or make me feel.. idk. But i love them. your words always moves me. omg at not being allowed to make the heart. lovelovelove
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