If the universe were my spittoon,
stars above would all dance to your tune.
The whole world would I bring,
With the moon on a string,
When you asked for a yellow balloon.
------- Author's Notes -------
I have tried a few times to write a Limerick. In every case I have been amazed at how bad they read.
Comments on this poem/writing:
|MC (188.8.131.52) -- Tuesday, December 5 2006, 07:30 pm|
but this is MUCH better. Still, I can't help but laugh at the analogy of the universe being a "Spittoon". I'm not so sure I get it, but it's different. LOL
|Bipedalguy (184.108.40.206) -- Tuesday, December 5 2006, 09:46 pm|
I'm glad you liked this. re "Spittoon" I had to be very big and powerful to be able to make "the stars dance to your tune" If I were so big that the Universe were like a spittoon to me, I guess I would be very big indeed. I also needed a word that rhymed with "tune". I know it's crude, but we in the "aahts" sometimes have to make these compromises, don't we?
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