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The Coopertown Jail
Author: Robert

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Clickity-clack went the sound of the rail,
As the train made it’s way to the Coopertown Jail.
The convicts were dressed in their denims of blue,
They were shackled together, two by two.

With furnace ablaze and making a roar,
The guards and their shotguns were both at the door.
We went on and on, into the night,
Until Coopertown Jail, came into sight.

“Stand here in straight lines, two by two,
Or it will be the end of you.
No time to kiss your mother goodbye,
For you’ll not leave, unless you can fly.”

Above the front door, we silently read.
“Try to escape and you’ll wish you we’re dead.”

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Comments on this poem/writing:

Meridian (71.241.31.244) -- Tuesday, February 6 2007, 04:48 am

w.o.w

Amazing Robert! I like the onomatopoeia expressed in your poem, such as "clickity clack"...the similar sound of a gun... For some reason, I think about "Cool Hand Luke" when I read your poem!

Wonderful poem Robert!
Robert (68.127.125.224) -- Saturday, February 10 2007, 12:32 am

clickity -clack

Glad you enjoyed my sonnet.. It was fun to write.
shiloh (74.65.121.49) -- Sunday, December 7 2008, 08:57 pm

quite well done, indeed

Makes me wonder if they were going to prison on The Night Before Christmas...?

the rhythm/metre of the lines almost makes the trip seem less threatening than it surely would be.

a pleasant read, and even allowing for the subject matter, somewhat refreshing in the use of a an old familiar beat - what an intriguing idea...

peace...
Bipedalguy (65.96.237.196) -- Monday, December 8 2008, 12:30 am

Great job

It's a pleasure to read a poem with such nice cadence, rhyme, effective choice of words, and subject matter which captures ones curiosity.
 
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