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Alice's Poem
Author: Crimson Angel

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Into the hole again, we hurried along our way
Into a once glorious garden now seeped in dark decay
Mange ridden to the core, he leads me through the fray
With the toss of a Jackbomb I clear admonitions from our way
They taut me about the burning as if I were to blame
I clear them from my conscious with the eloquence of my blade
If it's my keen invention you'd like to destroy
I'll withstand your best shot; I've got the right toy

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Comments on this poem/writing:

Meridian (152.163.252.102) -- Saturday, March 27 2004, 01:54 am

Comes Alive

Hey CrimsonAngel! Your poetry definitely comes alive!! Every sentence my eye came across, I could see each event take place in your poem!! Beautiful CrimsonAngel!
Keep up the good work!!
Crimson Angel (67.162.95.179) -- Saturday, March 27 2004, 04:48 am

Author's Comment

Thank you. =D Glad you like. I just got a game, the demented version of the tale Alice In Wonderland, and that poem is precisely the definition of the story plot. Figured I'd put it up for everyone to see.
Lady Eryemil (64.12.116.9) -- Monday, March 29 2004, 03:24 pm

^_^

I've got that game!!!
Anyways, your poem has a lot of life in it, great way to use your words. It seems that there are lots of people here with talent to put things into word, you seem to be one of them.

^_^
Crimson Angel (67.162.95.179) -- Monday, March 29 2004, 09:46 pm

Author's Comment

I love the game! =D I haven't beat it yet, but I did when I played it a few years back. But yeah, I try to bring life into my poetry so the reader will enjoy it as much as I enjoyed writing it. Thank you very much. ^.^
xx (172.132.25.218) -- Thursday, July 22 2004, 02:07 am

cool

great use of words i like the last line
Mike (82.35.244.198) -- Thursday, April 21 2005, 12:01 pm

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Bought the game a few months ago. It's damn hard.. I thought this poem seemed familiar while reading it, especially the jackbomb.. Couldn't quite put my finger on it until I read your comment. It's a great poem, very descriptive - not too much, not too little. Love it.
 
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