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A Day In Darkness
Author: Leah06

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The rain falls
Like tears from my eyes
Like all hope
Is lost.
The sun sinks
Light drains from the skies
Outside is filled
With darkness.

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Comments on this poem/writing:

LinzAy (152.163.189.205) -- Thursday, March 27 2003, 09:12 pm

''''''

I really like this...so much happiness and hope lost in just these few words....good writing.
Leah06 (12.232.5.189) -- Tuesday, April 1 2003, 03:18 am

Thanks!

This poem is obviously not a liking to people, but linzay, thanks for the comment.
MetaFlare777 (4.61.195.232, 1) -- Wednesday, April 2 2003, 07:47 am

Stalker Alert!!!

You got a stalker! LinzAy has commented on every single one of your poems!!! Oh wait, so have I. Nevermind then. Is there a way to remove this comment?!?!?!
MetaFlare777 (4.61.195.232, 1) -- Wednesday, April 2 2003, 07:49 am

A Serious Comment From the Desk of MetaFlare777

Hm....nice, straight to the point type poem. I was wondering if you had written any longer poems. Just seems like your style is monotonous in organization as well as syntax. I'd try exploring multiple varieties of styles.
Martin Vann (65.56.170.98) -- Wednesday, April 2 2003, 03:38 pm

Simple words, expressing, private thoughts.

Leah06

Yes,it was simple, but I picture the feeling, the rain, solitude, from a young heart. I feel these words as I in other short poems, they are simple, have meaning, not complicated and fresh.

That is not to say that I can't understand MetaFlare777's comment. We all see things in a different light and we all learn from each other. The wonderful thing about this dreamersreality site is that no one's light is put out.

We have have respect for each other.
Leah06 (12.232.5.189) -- Thursday, April 3 2003, 03:18 am

YAY MORE COMMENTS!

Thanks everyone for the coments. Metta LindzAy isnt my stalker shes just a friends. Thanks for your words of wisdome Uncle martin! lol
LinzAy (152.163.188.72) -- Thursday, April 3 2003, 06:13 am

Metaflare....

LOL.....stalker....hey........you never know!! lol!!
Leah06 (12.232.5.189) -- Monday, April 7 2003, 11:47 pm

AHHHHHH!!!!

Wow LinzAy, Verry SCARY!
Brenda Michelle (216.244.32.126) -- Tuesday, April 8 2003, 04:34 am

Once again WOWZERS

great!!!!!!! your poem was short sweet and to the point. i like that. and that MetaFlare777 as a very extensive vocabulary. i have to look in the dictionary to comprehend anything he is saying. its good in a way but i am not the person he would like to talk to, he would lose me when he starts. well, sorry about the inconvince of my blabering but one again WOWZERS
RinRin (24.25.55.231) -- Tuesday, April 8 2003, 08:39 pm

so darn cute!

i absolutely adore this poem!! i don't know why, but it seems to me that even though it's so simple and short, so much has been said! more than my little brain could even take in...wonderful!
Leah06 (12.232.5.189) -- Wednesday, April 9 2003, 12:52 am

Thanks everyone!

Im glad all of you like this one too. The same people comment on all of my poems which means those few like them. Thank you so much for the comments!
 
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