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Something's Wrong
Author: Lonlyrockstar

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somethings wrong
the beer is flat
my hills that hit the ground are weak
my voice seems to fade
no echos
everyone is gone
nobody insight
somethings wrong
the clock is moving slow
as time moves fast
their coming
the sounds get louder
somethings wrong
their almost here
as dark gets near
today is different
is the world coming to an end?
the time is almost up
my cup shatters but makes no noise
only thing to be heard is them
somethings wrong

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Comments on this poem/writing:

Kyla (216.54.14.84) -- Wednesday, December 11 2002, 01:46 pm

hi

great poem! keep it up
Tiffany (216.54.14.84) -- Wednesday, December 11 2002, 01:49 pm

great job

keep up the work.
lonlyrockstar (216.54.14.84) -- Wednesday, December 11 2002, 01:50 pm

Thank you

Thank you so much.
Ben (216.54.14.84) -- Wednesday, December 11 2002, 01:51 pm

i love your poem

i love it very much. great job and there is nothing wrong. lol
Kyla (216.54.14.84) -- Wednesday, December 11 2002, 01:52 pm

weird timing lol

what are these ppl doing to your poem? that is so mean. lol J/K
Kyla (216.54.14.84) -- Wednesday, December 11 2002, 01:53 pm

every min.

lol
Ben (216.54.14.84) -- Wednesday, December 11 2002, 01:54 pm

please don't erase this

this is so funny
lonlyrockstar (216.54.14.84) -- Wednesday, December 11 2002, 01:55 pm

ok then

stop you guys
anonymous (12.30.225.73) -- Thursday, December 12 2002, 03:46 am


nice poem reminds me of the great movie the langaliers
lonlyrockstar (216.54.14.84) -- Friday, December 13 2002, 01:31 pm

yep

yea i actually wrote the poem based on that movie. It was such a good movie i had to write about it. AGREE?
XoForeverXo (141.149.132.52) -- Friday, May 9 2003, 12:30 pm

no title

yeh i agree with ya rockstar and anonymous..def the first thing that came to my mind =)
luv it...
Prue_Haliwell (165.29.89.206) -- Tuesday, May 13 2003, 04:23 pm

Here's one for ya'!!!

Let my imagination's life soar. Take me to an open door. Bring together happiness and I.
Stay that way until I die...


...Here these words, here my cry. Spirit from the other side-Come to me, I summon thee. Cross now the great divide.

By: Prudence Marie Haliwell
lonlyrockstar (216.54.14.84) -- Friday, May 30 2003, 02:16 pm

hey

i like it....do you have any poems up here?
lonly teen (198.81.26.138) -- Saturday, November 1 2003, 07:43 pm

love it

that ia the way i feel every day i feel like that cause its like my whole life is always silent friends are fading and that touch me in the middle of my heart
 
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