Mental Note To Self
1 January, 1970
Author: Pamela O'Brien
Somewhere a mouth opens with the intent to scream
And a child wakes to find himself sweating from a bad dream
Somewhere five fingers are forming a fist
And a girl looks in the mirror dwelling on how she's never been kissed
Somewhere someone's eyes have become red with fury
And their body shakes, and their thoughts are blurry
Somewhere we are consumed by rage
And we stare through the bars of this cold steel cage.
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Comments on this poem/writing:
| LUC (67.36.186.75) -- Sunday, January 19 2003, 07:20 pm not entireling sure what it all means. but uh yeah it was nice. the way it all just flows to gether. i like ab poem patterns. and i liked the last line. like always ^.^ |
| Pamela (66.38.146.109) -- Sunday, January 19 2003, 07:51 pm I know, its a weird poem. I entitled it "Mental Note To Self" Because literally, these are things I was thining about and knew I may never think about again. So I wanted to write them down. I think its just a focus on all the rage and anger in the world. And how EVERYBODY, even the kindest of us, has rage built up somewhere inside. Glad you liked it though, despite its oddness. |
| everett (209.240.198.60) -- Monday, January 20 2003, 04:39 am well, i thought this was a well written poem. i can honestly say ive thought about the things you put down in the poem. you expressed them much better than i would have. good poem, i liked it. |
| Pamela (66.38.146.118) -- Wednesday, January 22 2003, 01:54 am Thanks Everett - no bigger compliment then someone saying your poem made them think for awhile..... |
| Death (24.107.198.180) -- Monday, January 24 2005, 05:21 am i love this poem, good job, it also made me think for a while, i will be looking for some more of your poems :D |
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