Deception Vs Perfection
Author: Pamela O'Brien


There's too much pre-occupation with self-satisfaction
And the world we inhabit is a fading attraction
Everyone sees themself as the one exception
But they have fallen victim to a life of deception

There's too much persistence to try and get a reaction
And the world we inhabit is a raging distraction
Everyone sees themself with clouded perception
But they have fallen victim to a dream of perfection


Comments on this poem/writing:

Capricorn ( -- Monday, November 11 2002, 11:35 pm

Good words

Good use of words - I like this poem
Pamela ( -- Tuesday, November 12 2002, 12:23 am


Thank you Muchly, I like this one as well. I think its negative, but in a way that it makes the reader want to be a better person. And it causes you to look at your life a little closer then you might like :O)
rachael ( -- Sunday, January 12 2003, 07:27 pm


i am currently trying 2 find a stimulus for a dance i have 2 choreograph as part of my gcse dance course, i chose perfectionism and this poem will b a great start 2 a hopefully great dance! thanx
giovy ( -- Thursday, July 3 2003, 01:44 am

just as im feeling

this poem perfectly describes the exact way im feeling right now. it has good use of words and makes complete sense.
Pamela ( -- Thursday, July 3 2003, 09:00 pm

Makes Sense In A Strange Way

Thanks Giovy, this poem does make sense but in a very ironic, non-sensical kinda way!
Glad to see people still comment on older poems sometimes.....made my day :o)
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