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If You
Author: Ryan

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If you never sleep, you'll never awake
If you never live, you'll never die
If you never love, you'll never break
If you never talk, you'll never lie

If silence is golden,
Then death is a gold mine.

I'm not another face in the crowd.
Even if I have to cut off little girl's heads to prove it.
I'll show you.

All of you.

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Comments on this poem/writing:

luc (68.74.120.35) -- Friday, January 31 2003, 03:41 pm


well... i liked the middle part."if silence is golden then death is a gold mine" i like how it just flows out of my tounge.. bout that littl girls heads.. hopefully thats just metaphors
LinzAy (205.188.208.104) -- Friday, January 31 2003, 11:14 pm

......

I love the beginning of the poem....but it weirded me out at the end......really weirded me out
Stacey (68.82.126.206) -- Saturday, February 1 2003, 04:59 pm

Intense

I think what Ryan is trying to say by the "little girl decapatation thing" is...He's Unique and he wants to be noticed and reconigized for it. He's not just your "everyday ordinary Joe"
I really loved this poem Ryan, it's really deep. Keep up the great work!!
~Stace
LinzAy (152.163.188.5) -- Saturday, February 8 2003, 08:53 am

unique

i totally see what your saying stacey.......
ryan (24.153.177.14) -- Wednesday, February 12 2003, 02:25 am

thank all of u

i would never ever do that to anyone im sorry if it wiered u out i didnt mean to afend anyone im not the normal person is what im trying to say and peoms are ment to express ur self so i expressed myself

lataz --ryan
Samantha (24.175.18.235) -- Wednesday, February 12 2003, 11:16 pm


Hey Ryan me again, very very very good poem. It's very deep, but yet you are too.
Izzy (64.12.96.40) -- Thursday, February 13 2003, 01:57 am


Golden. Deep. Niice.
Crazy 1 (24.72.92.94) -- Sunday, March 30 2003, 04:23 am

!.....!

I like the first part the ending was an interesting way to prove that you would show that you werent just another person in the crowd but im not going to take that cutting thehead part to an "oh my god" level if that makes sense because i understand now that sometimes poets or writers use all kinds of ways to show what they mean i think i learned that about 4 years ago when i found a poem my 16 year old brother wrote about murdering and stuff and when i asked him about it he said that he was just putting himself in another persons shoes for the purpose of writing! anyway i dont think anyone is just another person in the crowd we are all people that make up this world! we are all important and have a special place even though some people dont think so including me! anyway keep writing! : )
Leah06 (12.232.5.189) -- Saturday, April 12 2003, 10:18 pm

i like it!

I like this one ryan! Keep writing!
 
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