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Independence
Author: Barbara Goodhew

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I know you like your independence,
So do I
But independence can be boring
Since you and I became disabled
We have alot in common
Our independence is put on hold
Maybe til we get old.
Oh I forget you're already there
Thats okay I still care

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Stephanie (199.126.23.14) -- Wednesday, May 24 2006, 12:20 am

My thoughts

I think you got the idea right but you should realy think about whats a free verse and whats not. You started to ryme at the end but you didnt at the top. Also you have to remember to keep it interesting. Thank-you for reading
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