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Who Asked You
22 November, 2003
Author: Seizure

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You think you know it all, you think I'm in the wrong
Years have drug me down, I cannot be strong
You have many problems, many that are lies
What can I do to help? I'm not very wise
I suck at poetry, I suck at helping you
I suck at letting go, my death is overdue
Leave me in the dark, step back to the light
Continue the life that you have to fight

Who asked you to care, who asked you to try
Who asked you to fear, why care if I die?
Who asked you to trust, who asked you to share
With what I'm dealing with, what makes you think I care?
I don't have the chance to help anyone
Just how can I help? My own story's done
I hope you live long, I hope you live right
But how can I help when I'm not alright?

Days pass far too slow, I'm always outdone
I've hurt so damn much, I'm only twenty one
But I feel like, I'm at ninety seven
I'll never get the keys, to the gates of heaven
Even in death, I know I'm to hurt
I'm to decompose, and return to dirt
The wind will pick up, and try to set me free
It will spread my ash, all across the sea

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Comments on this poem/writing:

LinzAy (24.73.236.194) -- Sunday, November 23 2003, 11:36 pm

''''''

Hey Seiz!
Me's like!
Is everything okay? write me......
Leah06 (24.5.241.141) -- Monday, November 24 2003, 03:22 am

Seizure...

wow, again you leave me speechless. first, i must disagree with that comment on your poetry. You are a amazing poet! I dont know who told you otherwise but whoever did needs to speak with me because they have some serious issues. and i was never in the light to begin with so that part cant apply to me and as for who asked me to care, no one but who told me not to? no one. again great poem. and like i said before, not all of us are the same, and i am sticking to what i said in your other poem's comment.

Leah Kendall
Ashley R. (66.52.64.114) -- Monday, November 24 2003, 03:43 am

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Another great poem from Mr. Seiz himself. Good job Seizure! And if it helps, i also care.
Seizure (65.80.81.6) -- Monday, November 24 2003, 03:48 am

yeah...

LinzAy, I'd write you, but i have no idea when you'll see it. So I don't want to write and have you get old news several weeks later you know?

06, thanks. Your comment was heard & felt.

Ashley R, thanks, it was greatly appreciated.

I don't know if I should submit my next few I have already written. I'm just venting like mad lately... damn...
Terrie* (65.148.233.36) -- Monday, November 24 2003, 04:11 am

seiz......

seiz...i care...i always will care....a high majority of us really do CARE...i hope everything is alright...ya know w/all of us @ your side ya do not need to carry the weight of the world all by your self...you are not alone....it is good to vent your emotions...i am a keyboard away... it's 7p right now soooo i'm off to sleep i work the noc shift. keep that poetry posted, remember life consists of all emotions. what you already have written is a form of gifted art .... Terrie*
Ash (65.73.59.237) -- Monday, November 24 2003, 10:06 pm

Seizure...

Your poems don't sux, you do help people, and i don't want you to die. Your poems help people all the time because of their rawness and honesty which are 2 rare qualities found today. Never stop writing seiz.
Ashley R. (66.52.72.207) -- Tuesday, November 25 2003, 04:22 am

Seizure

Well, i'm sure if you do post your newest poems, they would definately be liked by the readers.
brandi (205.188.209.51) -- Saturday, November 29 2003, 12:53 am

hey

hey seiz, i havent been back here in a while, because of lack of time, but i come every now and then just to check up on your poems and i must say you havent lost your touch. all of your poems seem to suck me in. dont stop writing, your the reason i come to this site when i can.
Leah (204.112.162.3) -- Saturday, January 3 2004, 11:57 am

...

I'll admit you have awesome writing...anyone who reads your poems know it...but your poems are so sad...
KJP (67.112.79.23) -- Saturday, January 31 2004, 09:15 am

............

You have already helped a lot of people through your writings.
Morgan Marie (207.28.86.237) -- Thursday, April 15 2004, 05:17 pm

Very Remarkable

I am sitting here in class trying to find poems for a poetry booklett, and I am stuck on your poems. Ever since I have started getting on this site I have been in love with your poems!!! The way that they are written and the message that they give, it is impossible to not fall in love with them. They intrugue me!! Keep the enchanmet, wonder, fury and fear alive...
Scorpio (10.2.213.165) -- Monday, April 3 2006, 08:36 pm

Amazing

There seems like so much anger and vindictiveness in this- It's one of those poems I wish I could've put into words for my own emotions, but apparently you've done it for me. Seizure, I absolutely love your work and even though there must've been some hard ass times for you, it inspired you with a gift; a talent that really seems like it was worth all the pain. I wouldn't know personally, just from a few pathetic experiences, but I honestly think if it weren't for you as you are today then you might never have even written such beautiful pieces. Much hope on your half, from a friend.
 
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