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Do It
Author: Seizure

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You said you hated me, then you pulled a gun
You want to kill me, I am no one's son
You think that scares me, look at what I've seen
I welcome the chance, my soul's no longer clean
I will not back down, you're somebody's pawn
Pull the gun on me, forgive me if I yawn
With the hurt I've had, and the pain I've bled
How can you kill me? I'm already dead

Stick a knife in me, twist it all around
See my face contort, I won't make a sound
Beat me to the earth, go and shoot my head
Spread my body parts, make the river red
Do you think I care? Nothing scares me now
I've had all the pain, my brain will allow
Cut away my limbs, I won't shed a tear
Make me fade to black, I've nothing to fear

How can you hurt me, worse than I've had?
I have been through Hell, I know that makes you glad
Get it over with, you wish I was afraid?
Yeah, well, I'm not, it's been years since I've prayed
I am filled with anger, I am filled with hate
Nothing in me's good, how can you relate?
In this game of life, I have long since quit
Pull the damn trigger, go ahead, do it

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Comments on this poem/writing:

Stace (68.82.126.206) -- Friday, September 19 2003, 12:23 pm

To Seiz

Excellent piece Seiz. " i don't give a shit" would have fit nice at the end too. Either way, this poem is deep. good job
Stace (68.82.126.206) -- Friday, September 19 2003, 12:32 pm

oh yea...

btw... i think dreamer made a mistake on the title of this one.
Seizure (68.158.39.20) -- Friday, September 19 2003, 05:57 pm

i agree

Yes, I think she did make a mistake there. I'll let her know... originally I had, "I don't give a shit" there... but I changed it at the last minute because it didn't add the type "closure" I was looking for.
Ash (24.97.207.94) -- Friday, September 19 2003, 06:18 pm

Xcellent

Seiz i love how you can go from one emotion to another in each poem. It's great how you can write from so many different positions. Most ppl can only write a certain type of poem, but not you and that what makes you so great.
Ash (24.97.207.94) -- Friday, September 19 2003, 06:19 pm

no title

What was the title supposed to be?
Seizure (68.158.39.20) -- Friday, September 19 2003, 06:27 pm

the title

The title should be, "Do It." At the top of this page there was a typo and it was entitled, "Turned Away."
ashley nb (12.223.235.93) -- Saturday, September 27 2003, 09:43 pm

no title

i liked this poem, and all of your others also. keep writing, its great.
LinzAy (24.73.236.194) -- Friday, October 31 2003, 11:12 pm

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Yesyes...i see how the two(i dont give a sh*t and do it) changed the ending as far as closure wise...good call:) and good poem!
 
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