I Tried
3 March, 2003
Author: Seizure
The pressure, the stress, everything goes wrong
I want to make it pass, but minutes take too long
I grabbed my phone cord, and ripped it out the wall
I don't know a soul, so why expect a call?
I look around the room, roaches scatter fast
My pantry's full of bugs, money doesn't last
My bed is the floor, my blankets are my clothes
I could have lived well, look at what I chose
So many judge me, they say I lived in sin
Because I lived the streets? Because I cannot win?
You can't justify, your treatment of others
When you have a home, with your loving mothers
If you walked an inch, in my shoes today
You'd suffer more than, you could ever pay
So shut your fucking mouth, before you try and judge
Maybe one day I will, stop holding a grudge
I'm tired of life, I'm tired of fate
I want to live well, but it is too late
I'm destined to fail, like many times before
I try to better life, it just hates me more
I lay on the pavement, it chills to the bone
Then I rest my eyes, I wish I could have known
I wish that I could, stop feeling this pain
Soon I will be lost, like tears in the rain
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Comments on this poem/writing:
| Ryan Holden (198.30.166.54) -- Tuesday, March 4 2003, 07:04 pm another very deep and wonderful read, reminds me a little of a dark poem i wrote myself...I agree with you on people being judgmental, i would like to say they piss me off, but then am i not being judgmental as well? lol oh well....very deep poem once again, I hope that if this is from experience that you do not give up hope, there are people there for you :) |
| StacEy (68.82.126.206) -- Tuesday, March 4 2003, 07:57 pm I absolutely,positively love this poem Seizure. From the very beginning to the very end. You're very talented. :) ~Stace |
| LinzAy (64.12.96.105) -- Wednesday, March 5 2003, 01:33 am Seizure this is awesome!! The middle verse was what hit me the most-you are very talented **** -hehe..thats ur name bleeped out!! |
| barb (206.191.91.237) -- Wednesday, March 5 2003, 07:33 am Seizure It must be hard, good writing.As far as every time you try it dosen't work. Try Try Try again. don't give in. That's what I did kept trying until I got it right. Then they told me I had a brain tumor. figures Hha Ha just finally get it right. And time to start over again. |
| Seizure (216.47.215.144) -- Thursday, March 6 2003, 11:09 am Ryan, what is the poem titled that you had written similar to this one? I would like to check it out if you don't mind. Stacey, glad you liked it. It's been a long while since I last heard from you, I'm glad to see you're still around. LinzAy, thanks for bleeping out my name :). Always a pleasure seeing your comments... Barb, I think you got the right idea there. I think I'll give your advice a shot. |
| capricorn (62.30.217.106) -- Thursday, March 6 2003, 11:40 pm I am really enjoying your poems at the moment but haven't had time to comment...under pressure! This is wonderful writing.Don't give up on yourself Seizure just keep on trying. |
| leo (157.91.107.150) -- Friday, March 7 2003, 03:54 pm to me this poem dedicated to me because it not just you its me too! but i'm doing better and leaving a good life and i hope you do the same too. |
| Seizure (65.164.72.2) -- Tuesday, March 11 2003, 09:45 pm Thanks for your comment Cap. Don't ever feel pressured to comment on anyone's writing... only if you feel like it. I really appreciate it when you do though... Leo, nice to see someone could relate to the writing. Hope your life is going better... |
| brandi (205.188.209.71) -- Wednesday, May 14 2003, 01:47 am people who live well have no clue about what u go through every day. dont think me inconiderate but i once never thought i mean REALLY thought about what other less unfortunate people live like. ur poems tend to wake me up and show me the true harsh world. keep writing,ill keep learning. |
| stacey xxx (172.16.60.45) -- Thursday, June 5 2003, 12:12 pm WOW!!!!!!!!! speechless xxx |
| Ash (65.73.59.235) -- Wednesday, July 16 2003, 05:07 pm Oh seizure i cannot imagine the pain that u must feel and i can understand why you would hold a grudge. Who wouldn't? It's amazing how u can turn your pain into such beautiful words. |
| Michelle (66.161.184.106) -- Thursday, September 11 2003, 03:40 pm Damn, it sure has been a while. See you still got the great touch of writing poetry. Hey email me some time -k-! (snip)I'd really like to hear from you! I'm having some major problems in my life right now, don't know what to do anymore! |
| Ryan Holden (132.9.127.6) -- Sunday, February 22 2004, 07:26 pm Sorry about that seizure, i just read your comment about wanting to see my poem, i was just joining the military and must have been in basic training when you wrote that, if you would like to email me (snip) we can relate poems if you'd like i always love reading other peoples work and you as a fellow poet should know that it is an awesome feeling to hear what people think of your work. take it easy man, Holden |
| grey (4.62.216.243) -- Tuesday, September 28 2004, 04:51 pm beauty is found in the balckest of things i really enjoy your writting |
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