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Suicide By Homicide
3 February, 2003
Author: Seizure

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Warning: Extreme Language


I find myself walking, alone each night
This is meant to be, but how can this be right?
Everyone's in jail or they wind up dead
If they get too close, a bullet in the head
They think no one can touch them as they throw their sign
Another hollowed body, a victim of the time
Go ahead throw up, come in, fuck it throw down
Why you in a hurry to be in the ground?

You try to earn respect, stand up for what you claim
But as it turns out, you're a bitch without a name
You've gotta be a sheep to feel like a person
Little do you know it makes your problems worsen
Nothing that you do will stand out from the rest
But you stay the same, you think it would be best
Sorry to be the one to tell you otherwise
Do something now cuz everybody dies

Just go ahead put your sign in his face
Everyfuckin' body sees it in this place
I hope you can run or you better fuckin' fight
If you can't do either you will die tonight
Don't expect a big, funeral
No one now alive respects criminals
But if it's your fate, why should I step in?
This is just a fight you know you can not win

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Comments on this poem/writing:

Seizure (67.33.173.38) -- Tuesday, February 4 2003, 07:23 am

Wow :)

My fault... didn't know it was bad enough to get an explicit language warning :). I even got tisked by Dreamer!

Seriously though, I'll go ahead and let you all know there was a point to the profanity in this work. It's not just pulling stuff out of my ass trying to make offensive material. It's about life on the streets. Anyone that's been there will understand exactly why it's worded the way it is. If the profanity offends you, sorry, it won't happen in many of my future writings (can't say all, because I'm not certain at this point if I'll need to or not).

Hope you all understand.
Xeracy (204.113.161.185) -- Tuesday, February 4 2003, 11:19 pm

Nice!

It's an great poem. I can't say that I've experienced all of that, but the stuff that I have it describes perfectly. You tell it like it is. And if people get offended... well they should.:) As for "Extreme Language"... that's nothing compared to the language people use
Luc (68.74.144.97) -- Wednesday, February 5 2003, 04:04 am


i've heard worse. as in the language that is. it was a good poem. and know what you mean by the cuss words being there ...
Martin Vann (67.28.93.13) -- Thursday, February 6 2003, 12:47 am

Life on the street

Seizure, I doubt that you could fall upon your knees and state a prayer to our god of peace, without some form of Woops, can't say that!, being tacked upon your rebellious butt! Then again, you are a guest and this is a well, kind of private house, so don't blow away this public stage, and all of us who are your guest!Find a way to say F--- using the letter I, and use D instead of the word s---. Once you have learned to do that, then hey, your words hence forth are dead!

This may not be the place for your form of art, but art it is, without a cause, we are lost and always it seems, the cause is from some brick-head rebel like you that knows what he is talking about.

Much luck to you my brave and all alone friend! Well, not really alone, its just a question of in our case, testicles, don't you think?

Regards,

Martin Vann

P.S. As you have learned through research or personal experience, in certain places, its Bend Over if you want to eat!
Pamela (66.38.146.169) -- Thursday, February 6 2003, 05:00 am

Liked It

I liked it. Intense. Your clearly expressing your distaste for life in this one, by picking out small revelations.
LinzAy (64.12.102.31) -- Thursday, February 6 2003, 08:40 am

Insult or Comment?

I'm not really sure how to take any of your comments that you make to seizure, Martin. They confuse the hell outta me. But i hafta say that this is the place for his art. Each one of us that submits our poetry and such to this website brings some sort of life to it and I must say that the life Seizure brings to this reality of dreams--hehe--is an awesome one. It's so true and intense. Most of us that enjoy reading his poems need the reality he puts into his poetry. So with that i'll end this with a comment from me.....another great piece of work Seizuer
Martin V (65.56.173.69) -- Thursday, February 6 2003, 03:30 pm

No insult Intended at All!

Seizure, flys in the face of standards by smashing them, I like that. Brick-head, a term of endearment on the street, one who when he feels its right, stays the course. Changing his wording would bring death to his work. Rebel, not hateful, meainng a free-spirit, person of courage, I like that. I to appreciate his work.

I just say things differently and it was all a compliment, I think Seizure knows that. Once again, I suppose I should have just said, nice pome and let it go at that.

Martin
LinzAy (64.12.103.51) -- Thursday, February 6 2003, 09:28 pm

o..

o ok! :-)
Seizure (68.154.9.85) -- Friday, February 7 2003, 01:00 am

thanks everyone...

I just checked this page since posting it, and damn! I didn't expect such a well taken response! To think, not one flame... I'm on some kind of role!

Xeracy and Luc, I appreciate it. The reason I had the warning is Dreamer didn't want the younger crowd to stumble upon my vulgar self... although, for children, I feel all my work is inappropriate for them. That's why the warning is in there and I didn't want to start another flame war, hence my appology.

Martin, I understood everything you were saying there and appreciated it very much. You seem to understand where I'm coming from there. If you have more on your mind than, "nice poem," by all means, post it. Even if no one else understands it, I would like to see what you think about it.

LinzAy, always a pleasure. Thanks for sticking up for me when you felt I was attacked, I'll remember that in the future. Glad you liked it :).

Pamela, nice to see you still reading my poems :). I'm really glad you still enjoy them.

Thanks for taking the time out of your busy schedules to read and take in my art for all it's worth. That means a lot to me, thanks everyone.
Morgan (204.81.7.14) -- Friday, December 19 2003, 02:40 pm

So True!

This peom Is Hard to Accept But we have to as it is reality and tooo bad that we couldn't do anything about it. I love the way you express your feelings and the language- ahh who cares every one has heard the word F*CK before. Awesome Poem!!!!!!
silent bells (165.29.58.126) -- Friday, August 31 2007, 03:23 pm

AWESOME

i have always loved all your poems and think they show the power of speaking your mind as honest as anyone i have ever met if not more. and i understand why the cuss words make it awesome. they put five foe the feeling in it this way! love your poems!!!!!!!!!!!
 
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