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Still Falling
Author: Seizure

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Why is life so dark, I'll never see the light
Years and years ago, I had strength to fight
But then over time, I knew it'd disappear
I did not know when, this helped drive my fear
I faught life so much, to try and survive
Now that is all over, I'm cursed to be alive
How much suffering, should I have to take?
I think that my birth, was just a mistake

Seems like yesterday, life was going well
But today my life, is a lonely hell
I wish that someone, could save me from fate
But looking around, I see it's too late
I don't have family, I do not have friends
Not a soul will care, the day my life ends
I'm just so tired, I gave all I could
It is never enough, I fall more than I should

I was always hopeful, until I fell too low
Friends and family left me, I have nowhere to go
I feel so hollow, I do not have pride
Everything is empty, nothing's left inside
I think it is time, to give up this fight
Life is just something, I can never right
I am so frustrated, I punch at the wall
Why bother to stand, when I will just fall?

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Comments on this poem/writing:

Capricorn (62.30.192.1) -- Wednesday, December 4 2002, 10:41 pm

Deep feelings

You have expressed very deep feelings here Seizure and written your thoughts very well, as usual. I feel sad that your friends and family have left you,yet even though I have a few friends and a loving family there have been and probably will be times when I have felt as low as your poem expresses. Perhaps it is because of my family and friends that I eventually begin to rise up again, but feel it is really my own inner strength that brings me back up. I hope you will find your fighting spirit again Seizure.Your words say that no one would care, well I for one do!
A very moving poem!
Pamela (66.38.146.184) -- Thursday, December 5 2002, 12:41 am

Cannot Relate Per Say

Seizure, I cannot necessarily say the usual "I know what you mean" or "I understand" because I have similar feelings that are released in a very different manner. I wrote a response poem - "Already Fallen" by manipulating this one in parts and I hope it expresses to you that your anger with life would be better directed away from yourself instead of inwards. Self-destruction is inevitable if you fail to recognize the REAL destroyer......Your poem is clearly your soul on screen and I believe this is you at your most vulnerable. Which is why it is so honest and admirable :o)
barb (216.123.56.78) -- Thursday, December 5 2002, 01:18 pm

feelings

seizure this is the way you feel to bad. I found no one would help me either so I helped myself. We are still here so might as well make the best of it. good expression I felt like that 2 years ago.
Seizure (68.155.232.11) -- Thursday, December 5 2002, 05:47 pm

My reply...

Capricorn, I appreciate the comment. I'm glad you liked the poem and could relate to at least some part of it.

Pamela, I just finished reading your, "Already Fallen," poem and did not see your message here first. I did not know the intention of your poem was to reply to every single line in my work as it wasn't properly illustrated on the "Already Fallen" page. Glad you liked the poem though.

Barb, thanks for the props. Sorry you felt like that before. You know what I'm talking about then.

Thanks again.
Ruth Annesley (203.59.10.11) -- Tuesday, December 10 2002, 05:59 am

Deep

Hey seizure, long time no speak hey... I now come to this site only to read ur poetry, its sad yet so full of reality and a sense of truth. I try to write...still but havent found my spark for inspiration yet (still) Atleast you still have the talent of expressing yourself through these verses... you are truely talented... You know i've always thought so.

Luv Ruth
x
Seizure (65.164.72.2) -- Wednesday, December 11 2002, 01:30 am

Ruth...

And your comments are always greatly appreciated too!

Hope you find your creative spark soon.
Leah (12.232.5.189) -- Wednesday, March 12 2003, 02:14 am

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Dont worry, I WILL BE YOUR FRIEND! Good poem by the way.
Virgo (10.201.1.103) -- Thursday, April 17 2003, 05:42 pm

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I feel the same way
Ashley R. (64.66.207.64) -- Friday, October 24 2003, 05:27 am

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I dont think ur birth was a mistake, in my opinion. If anything, it was far from a mistake. Cuz if u weren't here, then there would be no1 to express their feelings so strong, that everyone can relate to. Ur a great poet, keep on writing!
 
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