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Are You Proud
15 July, 2002
Author: Seizure

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I sit by myself, Forgotten by them all
I thought I heard a noise, coming from the hall
So I went to see, but there was no one
Returning to the table, alone with my gun
I looked down the shaft, I put in a shell
I wonder if I will, be cast down to hell
No one understands, why I want to die
They like to think, I don't even try
I tried so damn hard, I talked to everyone
About how I was, a discarded son
Getting more depressed, my friends all left too
People like to use, everyone knows it's true
I know what to do, my future is so loud
I empty the chamber, look dad, are you proud?

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Comments on this poem/writing:

babygurl (216.135.36.186) -- Saturday, October 19 2002, 02:36 am


all your poems really touch me.
Seizure (68.155.221.75) -- Saturday, October 19 2002, 07:53 am

i'm glad

I'm glad for that. As long as even one person is reached, I feel my job has been accomplished.
nicole (67.227.173.128) -- Saturday, October 19 2002, 10:35 pm


i can relate to every single one of your poems sometimes i get feeling like maybe the only way out of pain is to kill myself but your poems give me hope keep it up you have real talent
Worm (64.12.96.205) -- Friday, November 1 2002, 03:28 am

...wow

I read almost all of your poems. I just found this site today. I love them, you have so much meaning! This one, "Are You Proud" is almost excatly like my life. Everyday sucks, but your poems are making me want to do somthing different, thank you a lot.

-Ashley_
Ashley (24.143.29.45) -- Friday, November 29 2002, 06:31 pm


Good Poem
Giselle (66.81.171.219) -- Tuesday, December 3 2002, 05:18 am

whoa...

i liked your poem. does this reflect on your true life or something?
Kami (198.81.26.110) -- Sunday, January 12 2003, 02:28 am

written from the heart

this poem seemed to catch me eye, just like your others. I especaily like this one because I can relate to it in so many ways.
leo (157.91.107.150) -- Friday, March 7 2003, 04:03 pm

i hope you okay

you are vary crazy and hell you going threw, but you will be okay if you just put down your shoe
if you pay no mind to them low life loser and go on with your life
9 out of 10 i bat you have a wife
LinzAy (152.163.189.134) -- Monday, March 10 2003, 07:48 am

......

o hey! i never saw this poem before......because imma loser! hehe...but anyways. Now that i have finally read it i must say...it's awesome!!
Leah (12.232.5.189) -- Wednesday, March 19 2003, 02:02 am

good as always

ok leo i dont get your comment but whatever. Sezure, great poem as always, keep up the good work!
Seizure (68.19.8.125) -- Wednesday, March 19 2003, 05:57 am

thanks...

Guess I should check my poems more often to see the comments they've accumulated. I understood some of Leo's comment... about half actually.

Glad it was something some of you could relate to... and others could just respect (or hate). Thanks everyone.
brandi (152.163.253.6) -- Monday, May 19 2003, 04:04 am

none

i think leos comment was like a poem. thats what i got out of it.... maybe cuz it rhymed. ur dad should be proud b/c theres a lot to be proud of in u. u have a band, u write better than anyone i know or have see, ur going through college, uve been through a lot and yet ur still a nice person, and every thing uve accomplished uve done on ur own. so if hes not proud then its his problem. it was great! really got to me
anonymous (67.80.116.193) -- Thursday, June 12 2003, 03:16 am

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as most other people said...i love all your poems...when i look through categories and see Seizure..i know it must be really good...they flow nicely and are touching...i can relate to some
Ash (65.73.59.235) -- Wednesday, July 16 2003, 05:10 pm

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Seizure what more can i say but whoa. There are not enough words to describe how much i love your work.
Ashley (66.42.75.158) -- Tuesday, October 14 2003, 03:18 am

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Thats so sad. Did that happen to a friend of yours or what? Cuz thats such a good poem!
Morgan (204.81.7.14) -- Friday, December 19 2003, 02:43 pm

I feel The same too

This peom Is so great. I bet Everyone has felt like this I know that i have and It sucks it just feels like everyone is ignoring you and you get so happy when your noticed I know all about it! This peom was really written well!!!!!!!
Jane Butterworth (217.137.136.121) -- Sunday, May 16 2004, 08:36 pm

I Feel

I would like to say how much I connected with your poem. My family is broken in a way. Though we are all still together all we seem to do is argue. I have been plauged with depression, drugs and everything bad and now I feel I can never please them, I feel unwanted, unloved and alone. I turned to poetry as a way out, I can escape in words and let my feelings show like in no other way. It's nice to know i,m not alone.
Yours greatfully
Jane
kisha (216.77.198.41) -- Monday, February 14 2005, 08:30 am

touching

i can really relate, great poem
 
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