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Lost
Author: Bench

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I stood numb
Feeling cold
Under the heat
Of the sun.

Tears wanting to fall
My heart racing
And the beating
Drowns all the other sounds.

I could not look at you
Nor even steal a glance
I only feel you beside me
Saying things I don't want to hear.

And the last words
Were the only ones I heard.
"Let us stop seeing each other."
Then you were gone.

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Comments on this poem/writing:

Lady Moon (204.32.65.233) -- Wednesday, October 8 2003, 11:52 pm

How heart breaking...

How heart breaking Bench, seeing that your love is gone! I'm still young, but I can imagine what it must feel like! This poem automatically layed it out for me. Great Job! Keep Writing, and I'll keep reading!
Ben (67.122.251.118) -- Thursday, October 9 2003, 06:45 am

"cold, Numb under the heat of the sun"...

Good writing here, Bench! I agree with the Lady Moon, heart breaking. You used some powerful words to express it. "Numb under the heat of the sun", very descriptive!
Keep writing! Thanks!
bench (192.168.0.172) -- Thursday, October 9 2003, 08:55 am

lady moon/ben

That was about my latest heartbreak. Thanks for the comments.
 
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