thought, thats what they are
thoughts embedded deeply in my mind as if they are sealed tightly in a jar
i cant let them out
the anger and pain they would cause would be unbearable
i wont let them out
sometimes i feel overcome w/anger
so much anger i can hardly see
i must swallow the thoughts down farther
at times my thoughts scare even myself
o what they would do to others if they were unleashed
no, i must keep them where they cannot be reached
sometimes i feel so helpless
like theres nothing i can do that would change the way things are,
like i must look at things from afar
but these thoughts are what give me my strength,
they are what strive me to do better;
to make a difference
they are my sense
my sense of life and the world around me
without them i would be lost
just not me
Comments on this poem/writing:
|dymond (126.96.36.199) -- Tuesday, May 6 2003, 10:09 pm|
I liked the way she rhymed and still made enough sense to publish a great poem. Thumbs up!!
|Brandi (188.8.131.52) -- Wednesday, May 7 2003, 01:40 am|
im new at this site and also im a new writer ive recently began writing and im not very old. ill leave it at that. its great to get feedback of any kind. if u have suggestions or just comment let me know id appreciate it. i really like expressing myself through writing and id like to improve. thanx a lot dymond im glad you liked it!!!
|Seizure (184.108.40.206) -- Tuesday, May 13 2003, 02:30 am|
thought you said I wouldn't like your subject matter? I can relate to a lot of parts in this one. Good job.
|brandi (220.127.116.11) -- Tuesday, May 13 2003, 02:43 am|
well its not like urs seiz!! it starts deep but lightens in the end. thats the way i am. thanx for the nicde words.
|Megzy (18.104.22.168) -- Tuesday, May 13 2003, 09:03 pm|
hey i knoe this gurl. lol. ive said be4 and i ll say it again i love it...its so bootiful. i can totally relate to this poem.. keep up the good work. love ya lots
|brandi (22.214.171.124) -- Wednesday, May 14 2003, 12:31 am|
well meg thanx!! whenam i gonna start seeing some of ur poems on the site? lyl!!
|ashley (126.96.36.199) -- Thursday, May 15 2003, 12:02 am|
hey, great job!! loved the poem, could feel it--thats what its about.
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