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Their Wall
Author: Brandi

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What do u do when a friend wont let u in,
No matter what you do you cannot win
You beg them to share their thoughts,
But they don't seem to want to talk
You can see the pain in their eyes
Like two stormy skies
You want to help, but what do u do?
Just let them hurt?
But it hurts u too
How do you cheer up someone so down?
They don't want to hear a sound
They want it all to end
But their heart you want to mend
Life itself they wish would die
And all you want to know is why?
Who deserves this kind of pain
Where is the sun? its always rain
You cant find the door into their heart
Not even a window, not a crack, nor a mark
Why do they always push you away?
When you know you have to stay
You cannot leave them; you cannot give up
They need you there to give them a boost up
You stay by their side,
Its your shoulder on which they cry
You have to be their wall
Standing firm and tall
For them, you know you must
You just pray you're strong enough

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Comments on this poem/writing:

CrYsTaL (216.63.217.252) -- Thursday, May 15 2003, 05:09 pm

wooooooooooo!

L-O-V-E-D this one Brandi, great way to show that prayer is the answer in the end! Love the way you put every piece together!
ashley (12.222.12.163) -- Thursday, May 15 2003, 08:26 pm

great

loved it! great job brandi, uve told me before that your poems are stupid, i clearly can not see anything stupid here. keep up the good work!
brandi (205.188.208.133) -- Friday, May 16 2003, 12:27 am

thanks

hey crystal, thanks a lot!! i love getting comments back from people. ashley- well yes i do say that but you know what they say "you are your own worst critique" and thus it is true in my case.
Seizure (67.33.163.29) -- Friday, May 16 2003, 03:03 am

it was good..

I liked it quite a bit. Well written.
Megzy (67.195.45.136) -- Wednesday, May 21 2003, 09:06 pm

good job

bumble bee that was really good... that poem really shows how we feel about u knoe who....you express your feelings very well... and good job w/ the rhyming.. it wasnt all conjusted together. wonderful wonderful!
brandi (152.163.252.103) -- Thursday, June 19 2003, 09:06 pm

yea...

u kno how i feel about ryming lol....hey meg, can u lay off callin m bumblebee? how about just bee liek everyone else calls me? or brandi? yea thisis my favorite poem...thanks u guys
cyndi (209.68.147.232) -- Wednesday, October 15 2003, 09:11 pm

tears

i like this poem... it's okay... but the good part about it ... is that it rymes... hehe
brandi (205.188.208.137) -- Saturday, November 29 2003, 12:10 am

umm yea

well cyndi thanks i think. i like the rhyming part as well though im not sure if that is the best part of my poem.....but thanks for the comment
Terrie* (65.148.215.137) -- Saturday, November 29 2003, 06:29 pm

excellent

Brandi ,two thumbs up for this and all your other poetry...you are indeed a true caring person ..your poetry portrays that unique caring side of you..keep that poetic talent inspired....this is beautiful work...Terrie*
 
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