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Who Are You
Author: Seizure

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I'm losing my house, I don't really care
There's worse things in life than a couch or a chair
I'm losing my life, it's been lost before
I lived through it then, why not once more?
I'm losing my cash, I got my degree
The market is full, there's no room for me
I'm forgotten by joy, but what else is new
It'll take more than that to run me through
The world will fade, I'll be in the dirt
Before I'm too old, I'll finally not hurt
Before I am gone, I've got this to say
There's not a person to take pride away
Other than yourself, other than your mind
If you look inside, who will you find?

------- Author's Notes -------

This is probably one of my first attempts at a more "abstract" poem... Be gentle.

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Comments on this poem/writing:

Ash (66.195.15.214) -- Tuesday, October 19 2004, 04:10 pm

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Great to see a new poem by you seiz. I love the last line here, its just one of those lines that really make u think. Nice job. Keep postin!
Meri (172.142.162.197) -- Tuesday, October 19 2004, 07:08 pm

Better than Superb

Hey Seizure! Of course, I'll be gentle, delicate, and nice when critiquing your work! You're the brain, the mastermind; you write with such intellect! Who are you? makes me thing about a reflection. I can visualize someone standing in front of the mirror, trying to discover who they REALLY are. Unpeeling the skin, and looking DEEP within themselves, to see their heart!

PERFECTO SEIZ!
Smiley face,
Meri
Leah06 (24.7.31.81) -- Wednesday, October 20 2004, 12:05 am

Lovin it!

This was wonderful! Not at all like the others. I like this new style of yours, the old one was great too but this one is new and unexplored! AMAZING!
Love ya!
~Leah Kendall
Terrie* (65.148.206.152) -- Wednesday, October 20 2004, 12:56 am

Seize, very appealing piece....

i found this read rather insightful..so much we tend to take for granted.a reminder.... never to lose sight of whom we are deep in our hearts...during our most dark moment...i am always so impressed w/your creations...

Truely an awesome read......i like.....very impresssing....
joyce ivy (65.12.35.210) -- Wednesday, October 20 2004, 05:31 pm

Seizure..this is great

You know we all have dark moments...as you can see from some of my poems..but i always pick myself up..as i can tell from this poem you do to...you did a great job on this one...very deep..love it...you go !!!
Seizure (68.211.5.54) -- Thursday, October 21 2004, 02:22 am

thanks everyone

didn't know what kind of reaction to expect with this one... I appreciate all the good comments. I'm glad at least some people found it thought provoking...
 
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