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Crimson Tears
Author: Mike

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Red rivers running down my cheeks,
The droplets forming blood red streaks.
As I lay wide awake in bed,
Whispered voices echo through my head.

I try to imagine how the world would be
Without a lost and lonely figure, without me.
Would it be a better place?
Should I just run - hide my face?

All of these questions heading straight for my brain.
I have everything to lose but nothing to gain.
These crimson tears flowing from my eyes,
the cause? Pain, fear, anger, lies.

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Comments on this poem/writing:

Meridian (172.132.122.99) -- Tuesday, November 2 2004, 11:58 pm

C.T.

Mike! You've created a fabulous piece of art, when you say "red rivers running down my cheeks----"

Super in describing the way you feel, and comparing different things to your emotions!
CREATIVE MIKE!

Smiley face,
Meri
Mike (82.35.77.233) -- Wednesday, November 3 2004, 06:55 pm

Thanks Meridian

This is one of my more recent ones. I changed my style and was wondering if it was good, or at least ok. Thanks for the reassurance and the compliments. :)
joyce ivy (68.19.188.222) -- Wednesday, November 3 2004, 08:25 pm

VERY CREATIVE

another good one Mike..I also like to right dark poems...I reakky like this one..like meri I love the "red river running down my cheeks"
GREAT JOB
Raimee (80.5.40.153) -- Wednesday, November 3 2004, 09:07 pm

Whatever.

Another good one. :)
Leah (204.112.162.35) -- Wednesday, January 5 2005, 09:47 am

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True tears are te emotiosn we dont knwo what else to do with.....sometiems theyre happy sad or filled with rage . I liked the way you said they were crimson.....
LBK (84.9.36.131) -- Friday, March 11 2005, 10:58 pm

...

"Without a lost and lonely figure, without me.
Would it be a better place?
Should I just run - hide my face?"

No, it wouldn't
 
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