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The Insomniacs Wish
12 April, 2005
Author: Holly

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I'm trapped in this room, with just my thoughts for company.
The radio can't drown out the sounds in my head.
I'd sell my own soul in exchange for some sleep.
I'm hopelessly chained to this bed.

The only escape from the pain they call life,
Is when my mind is dormant.
In this darkness my thoughts are all too clear.
Please save me from this torment.

I'd love to escape this world, and dream.
But life never goes away.
Count the hours, as light seeps in.
And night melts into day.

I won't be scared of the nightmares.
It's a nightmare when I'm awake.
A chance to be anywhere else than here.
Is a chance I long to take.

The tiredness makes my fears much worse.
This paranoia could kill.
Give me the energy to get through the day.
My mind and body so ill.

It's choking, forcing itself on me.
Sucking my every breath.
Just take me away from the world for good.
To the final sleep they call death.

------- Author's Notes -------

Insomnia's something I find quite hard to write about...I can't help thinking this poem needs work :|

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Comments on this poem/writing:

anon (67.38.179.138) -- Tuesday, April 12 2005, 08:11 pm

I have to wonder

I have to wonder why would a person put a poem they feel "needs work" as a finished product to display for the world to see. And then tell every one about it being so... Wouldn't it be better to only display what you consider your best work??? Or fix the poem's inadequacies first? After all quality is better than quantity just wonderin.....
Holly (82.34.160.81) -- Tuesday, April 12 2005, 10:22 pm

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You have a point, but I use this site more as a place to put them, since I don't want my parents to see them. And if people don't like my work, that's up to them.
anon (67.38.179.138) -- Wednesday, April 13 2005, 02:24 am

just put them

I am sure there are other places you can "put them" so they won't be seen. Please don't treat Dreamersreality as a place just to store stuff because you have no where else to place it. It cheapens the site. I guess mainly what I am trying to say is don't put your work down. No one knows you don't think it is good don't put the thoughts in to peoples minds. Personally I like your work. And I liked the poem till I seen you didn't.
Britney (67.136.94.248) -- Wednesday, April 13 2005, 02:48 am

Wow

This poem was a really good poem. You know what your work is wonderful.... and don't put it down. You really should "put them" here. Don't let your self down as much as you would like too. Keep it up I enjoyed it....~Britney~
Holly (82.34.160.81) -- Wednesday, April 13 2005, 07:39 pm

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I see what you mean about putting the idea in people's minds...I juist had this idea of people reading it and going "why is she posting that rubbish?". But thanks for your nice comments xD
~Shira~ (67.21.254.200) -- Thursday, April 14 2005, 04:21 am

Mmm..

I see that would be tough to write about. insomnia is nice though. Sleep is so borind and overrated..

Lovely poem
Mike (212.85.21.178) -- Thursday, April 14 2005, 04:09 pm

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When you told me that you finally wrote the poem about insomnia, you told me it could have been better. Reading it now, I think it's perfect.
 
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