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I Remember The Night / I Remember The Sunrise
Author: Mental

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i remember the night
i was full of delight
a wonderful sight
i knew this time
it would ignite.
i was nevous and uptight
we held so closely
and our eyes said goodnight.
i remember the sunrise
frosty tears outside
was no surpise
no caring in her eyes
i was suddenly in paralyze.
i lost her foever
it's no disguise.

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Comments on this poem/writing:

Meridian (205.188.116.200) -- Wednesday, May 19 2004, 04:07 pm

Hey Mental

Beautiful flow and excellent rhyme scheme! I love the way you put emphasis on your pain... I'm sad that you lost her forever though.... But very good title to sum up the events that happened that night and early that morning....
Very heartfelt and heart touching!
Excellent Mental!
Smiles
Meri
sonya (65.89.98.21) -- Monday, February 14 2005, 03:50 am

i remember that night/ i remember the sunrise

i love it so much can you write one for me
taboo (71.68.228.189) -- Thursday, February 13 2014, 11:32 pm

no caring in her eyes

very flowing and true i'm sure. excellent
 
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