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Elemental Love
19 April, 2004
Author: Eryemil

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Tears that were never meant for me,
Let them bathe my broken body,
Let them heal my hopes and wash away the moments,
That safe in a place that only his tears can reach,
Cause themselves the pain,
>From which I try to hide them.

His long denied Breath
Let it caress away,
The dullness in my hair,
Which with a life that's not of it's own,
Will unconsciously sway,
With the beat of my hidden sorrow.

I watch the bitter Earth defile my lips,
And mix with blood from my wounded heart,
It's metallic taste will give me strength
To cry out his name just one more time.

The Fire in his eyes slowly burns,
The empty shell that long ago held my hopeless dreams,
I do prefer an unhurried death,
So even as my vessel dies,
My mind can feed off the life that his gaze holds.

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Comments on this poem/writing:

Meridian (64.12.116.200) -- Wednesday, April 21 2004, 04:48 pm

Amazing!

Brilliant, Fantastic, Wow..........this Love Unrequited poem on Elemental Love leaves me speechless! I like the way you break things down in your poem! Every stanza leaves me in awe! This is definitely a lovely, outstanding poem!
Keep writing Lady Eryemil!

P.S. You don't mind if I call you lady E do you?
If you do, I'll be sure not to do it. LOL!

Have fun,

Meridian
Tammy (66.38.6.216) -- Wednesday, April 21 2004, 05:04 pm

Awesome

This is awesome work....like Medridian said amazing!
Lady Eryemil (205.188.116.130) -- Thursday, May 13 2004, 04:25 am

^_^

I don't mind at all Meridian... Thank you for your
words, you're far to kind, you too Tammy ^_^
Angie (68.53.188.176) -- Sunday, June 13 2004, 08:40 am

*_*

I love the way u worked the elemental things into ur poem and it turned out great, very deep and a great love "story"...
 
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