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The Dream Plunge
Author: SweetVenom

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Tall pine trees touching the skies,
With strong winds making them sway,
I was lost in one of the dark thicket of the woods,
In search of a way out, hungry without any food.

With dried pines cracking under my foot,
I was frantic and shouting like a frog,
Soon my throat was dry and parched,
I couldn’t walk much, as my calves soared and legs ached.

With a stick in hand, scantily dressed to wade,
the cold wave blowing over me, I managed,
walking uphill, As my strength began to fade,
I held her talisman close to my face and kissed.

I reached the summit of the hill,
Panting hard for the lost breath, I looked down,
To see the beautiful deep valley that gave me a jolly-feel,
Thick bushes, rocky ruggedness and steep bottom,
made me frown.

I walked ‘West’ towards the setting ‘Sun’,
As I took my next step ahead, I tripped,
As I made a narrow plunge, I was ripped,
Traveling down, like a bullet fired from a gun.

Finding myself settled on the ground,
I was wrapped under the covers,
With the cold floor making me numb, I scrambled
hard to get up, from a terrible dream to recover.

I felt something writhing as I moved my hand,
It was the talisman I had snatched from her neck,
With my wavering mind waging wars at the back
of my mind, I snuggled close to her and went to sleep.

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Comments on this poem/writing:

Nay-Nay (204.57.47.2) -- Tuesday, December 21 2004, 07:25 pm

I like...

I like this poem alot.
I t gives me a picture of what the writter might be like in person
Aravind (10.145.78.36) -- Wednesday, December 22 2004, 03:20 am

Nice

Nice da...
Abi (156.25.4.2) -- Wednesday, December 22 2004, 11:38 am

Great

ur poem.. is great.. I like.. it very much..
Chandru (192.168.48.121) -- Thursday, December 23 2004, 12:17 pm

gr8....

fantastic..i cud feel and picturise myself..very nicely blended throughout..
Chandrika (192.168.174.82) -- Thursday, December 23 2004, 12:17 pm

Well said

Words are well measured
Phantom (192.168.48.137) -- Thursday, December 23 2004, 01:05 pm

Gud one

a nice plunge to come up in flying colours
joyce ivy (68.19.189.239) -- Saturday, December 25 2004, 09:44 am

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very good poem...well written...thanks for sharing...joyce
Muco (212.175.66.204) -- Friday, December 31 2004, 06:17 am

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I liked it.
anitha (61.11.75.53) -- Monday, January 17 2005, 05:41 am

good work

i wonder how u manage to get rhyming words not deviating from the essence of the poem!
 
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